The morning air was cool and brisk on my skin as my sister
and I trudged to the bus stop across the street. We headed towards my new
school mates, I gulped and my knees began to tremble. The kids towered over me
making me feel like a tiny ant. They spoke so maturely and seemed completely
un-phased about starting school. Too them, this day was nothing more than déjà
vu. I clung to my older sister clutching her hand tightly within mine. She shot
a cold glare at me and tried nudging me off of her until she saw puddles
forming in the corners of my eyes. I heard a loud bustle that sounded like one
of those huge 18-wheeler trucks I’d seen on the highways. I turned around and
there in front of me was this massive burnt yellow contraption on six wheels.
It smelled of smoke and gas and it was quite filthy. It was almost as tall as
the tree on my front lawn and about as long as three cars, it read “Shaker City
Schools” on both sides in black letters, and it had a thick black horizontal
line stretching all around it. The bus driver stopped abruptly and the wheels loudly
screeched against the pavement. Suddenly, the glass doors opened and a bright
red blinking sign, which read “STOP” in bold white font, extended from the
other side. All the kids marched to the bus in a single file line. My sister
was headed for the back of the line. But still squeezing her palm, I resisted.
My legs went numb and stiffened as if they had turned into cement pillars
sprouting from the concrete side walk. “Come on Nia!”, my sister urged me, “It’s
time for school!”. I took a deep breath in, closed my eyes and exhaled. My boney
knees lightly smacked each other while I wobbled up the steps of the bus. The
doors shut behind me before I knew it. And there I was contained within the
stomach of that huge yellow monster formally known as the school bus.
Hey, Nia.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you describe the school bus in such an original manner and tone. This kind of exactness, of specificity is great--use this style of writing in the memoir! I can really feel your anxiety, too, when you describe all the physical symptoms of nervousness.
Nice job, Nia!
The way you described your story about your first bus ride reminded me of mine! I loved how you described how your knees were shaking and how your legs stiffened and turned into cement pillars from the sidewalk was brilliant! It really felt like you brought us there right next to you and that's what I love about creative writing. I love this piece because of, as Courtney said above, how the exactness added to your style in the memoir. I think you did an awesome job on your memoir section!
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